Those are powerful sentences.
I read this (quite shallow, by the way) column on powerful writing in a blog. On the comments, I wrote "to know how to write powerful sentences one must write poetry first."
What is poetry, if not a bubbling of strong statements? What is poetry, but the image of something, an image of an IMPORTANT something, stated in a few words? Of an action, murmured in only a verse?
When I read this poem, I imagine a horrid field, covered with a blanket of gray clouds and the smell of death. I feel hints of the Holocaust. I hear injustice, horror, tears. I feel so much, in only two stanzas.
And that, is what poetry is about.
Have a nice day,